Might as well put my high powered training as a fiction writer to use here: Story might be a better and more convincing read if written ala Hemingway (read "Hills Like White Elephants" for instance. Hemingway will always be the absolute master for how to render dialogue for any genre, I'll argue. Or anything by Raymond Carver, another minimalist type of writer who used Hemingway as a model. I would say that today, their contemporary is Nicholson Baker. Otherwise. . . not so sure of the story. Just my 2 cents.
Hayden exploded at me once for essentially "destroying" a great poem due to the lack of form. I would have like to ignore him and did my best to suggest that a good story cannot be flawed based on form alone. I've done enough writing to now know that, well, Hayden was right. but I rather discuss that directly with the writer than a reader who doesn't quite get it.
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story a bit difficult 2 follow: would try another approach
Date: 2005-08-25 07:13 pm (UTC)Story might be a better and more convincing read if written ala Hemingway (read "Hills Like White Elephants" for instance. Hemingway will always be the absolute master for how to render dialogue for any genre, I'll argue. Or anything by Raymond Carver, another minimalist type of writer who used Hemingway as a model.
I would say that today, their contemporary is Nicholson Baker.
Otherwise. . . not so sure of the story.
Just my 2 cents.
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Date: 2005-08-25 08:37 pm (UTC)About "form" per Hayden Carruth
Date: 2005-08-25 08:43 pm (UTC)I've done enough writing to now know that, well, Hayden was right.
but I rather discuss that directly with the writer than a reader who doesn't quite get it.
Re: About "form" per Hayden Carruth
Date: 2005-08-25 09:16 pm (UTC)congratulation, I am banning you until you can behave like an adult
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Date: 2005-08-25 10:12 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2005-08-25 10:55 pm (UTC)